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The Yawning by *jwules:iconjwules:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


The Yawning
I saw the sky roaring bright,
Mouth split open wide,
Bleeding out colors like some seventeen year old
Contending with the universe for the first time,
Ready to spit out the stars
And constellations of shattered smiles.
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Innocence is lost every day.

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Mood: Approval *Miss-S-Bird Mar 19, 2007, 4:56:17 AM
I really like this! The imagery is brilliant. I forgot the posh term I learnt in my english lecture the other day, but basically theres the first image you get, then as you look into it you begin to see more meanings in the words. Its really different to the poetry you usually get along a 'sky' theme, which makes it interesting.

Nice job!
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*jwules Mar 19, 2007, 4:59:54 AM
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. ^__^ That's definitely something I try to do with my poetry at times.
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Mood: Mesmerized ~steadfastfire Mar 19, 2007, 8:08:41 AM
Personally, I see a dialectic of contraries--the sky is both beautiful and ugly, peaceful and horrible. I love the bleeding of colors; it provides a very stark contrast to the innocent way people generally see sunsets/sunrises/the sky in general.

Very good job! *Snaps* ^_-

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Quare via impiorum prosperator?

Cities Burn. People Die. But true love lasts forever.... (the Crow)
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